Shams Al-ani's Excerpt

This is an excerpt from my final copy:

When Alice fell through the rabbit-hole for the second time, she was certain that she was once again stuck in a seemingly never-ending dream; after all, she could not recount the events that had led to her fall.
"Oh no, not this dream again!", she cried.
Alice began to remember the last time she had dreamed of falling through the rabbit-hole; she had awoken in a state of temporary insanity that eventually led to her admission into a psychiatric ward. Her humiliated father was so desperate to preserve the family name that he left soon after her release and told people that Alice had died in a tragic car accident.
Her perfectly fitting blue dress, ruffled and muddy; her wavy golden locks of hair now a tangled mess of curls and a painful graze from the fall bled from her right knee.

Desperate, Alice began to pinch her arms in hopes of awaking herself from what was bound to be a horrid nightmare.
"Ouch!", she exclaimed, "Maybe if i try again..."
She once again attempted to pinch herself awake.
"Ouch! That really hurt. Why am I not waking up?"
Alice then spotted a brick pathway in the distance and curiously decided to follow it, naively thinking that if she hurried towards the end of the path she would wake up, like what had happened in her last dream.