The Original story is called "Cinderella" by Walt Disney pictures. This story has been edited for entertainment purposes only.
This is a story about a girl named
Cinderella. She was once a kind girl that cared for the other, until her
parents death that made her feel she has lost everything and had nothing left in
the world. Her anger went towards her two kind step sisters. As years passed
by, they were invited to the grand ball, the Prince was looking for his
princess.
"O wow,
Cinderella this is lovely" said one
"It’s gorgeous..."
said the other.
Both step sisters were holding on to the dress very tightly
and recklessly fought over to hold on to the dress.
"If you don’t mind sister, I will
hold on to it first." said one
"No. I will thank you very much."
They were pulling and tugging on to the dress like a
rope...
"Stop it!" Cinderella shouted
...and ripped the dress apart.
The room was filled with silence; the step sisters were
able to fill the anger and shock of Cinderella's reaction. Cinderella yelled
and screamed and pushed the both sisters on to the ground.
"How dare you! My mother’s dress!" She shouted,
Her step mother ran up to Cinderella's room and shouted
"Stop!"
Cinderella was just about to slap her sisters.
"What is going on here?" Step mother asked with a
disappointing look on her face.
"They... They ripped my mother’s dress!" Cinderella cried with anger and sorrow.
The step mother was told what has happened and she came to
a decision.
"Cinderella. I am grounding you from going to the
ball."
"What? Come again?" Cinderella was shocked.
"This is not just about the actions you have made
today but also all these years you been making your sisters do all your chores
and threatening them. Yes, I’ve seen
it all. We will put this all behind after the ball." Step mother stated
very clearly.
...
The day of the loyal ball Cinderella was locked inside her
room.
She was crying, screaming and shouting, thinking of her
past when she had her parents.
Then. *poof* three fairies dresses in blue, green and pink
came to help her to go to the ball. Cinderella was grateful. So grateful that
she grabbed the three wands and put
the fairies in to the cage and prepared herself for the loyal ball.
"O dear." the three fairies were worried,
but did not panic.
They put a spell on her eyes, a spell so that what she sees
as a beast will appear as a handsome prince.
"The wand cannot stay away from us for long. Only till
midnight your free." warned the blue fairy
Cinderella head to the ball with the three wands, she planned a way
to ruin the ball.
…
There was music everywhere, soft and quite music. People were dancing,
eating and talking until the announcement.
“The Prince” said the announcer.
“O my…” said a lady.
“O dear…” said the other.
Rumours were true, he is a beast, and however, people were not afraid.
Prince was looking for his true love, the first kiss, to break his curse and
live happily ever after.
To the left to the right he was looking over the ball but yet he found his
love.
“O no!” a women screamed.
“HAHAHA having fun were you? Without me? How rude.” Cinderella laughed with
an evil voice.
She has frozen a man that was in her way of the entrance.
As the beast turned around to see her and fell in love. He loved how
gorgeous she was, the eyes, nose, mouth, everything. He did not see the evil in
her.
The step sisters tried to stop her, but it made her even angrier, she made
her two sisters in to a frog. She laughed away and kept freezing people until
it came around to the beast. Her eyes wide opened, step by step went closer to
him.
“Who… are you?” asked Cinderella.
She dropped her three wands, and those wands disappeared.
They got closer together and looked in to each other’s eyes. They felt like
they were reading off each other’s mind.
Until then,
“Guards!! Take her away to the dungeon!” said the King.
Cinderella was grabbed by the wrist, she tried to get away, and she wanted
to be close to the beast.
“No! Father stop this non-sense!” said the Prince.
“Non-sense? How can this be a non-sense?” asked the King with an angry
voice.
“Father I love her…” He confessed and ran up to kiss Cinderella.
Lights came out of nowhere; the Prince was changing back one by one.
Cinderella could only then see the beast, but she was not surprised, she was happier
than ever.
As Prince changed back to his full self, everyone celebrated.
Music got louder, people laughed and danced.
“We shall forget about the past, and look forward to the future. I announce
Cinderella as my son’s wife, and I am truly happy for both of you. Cheers!” said
the King.
“Thank you, your highness. We will live happily ever after” she replied
with the tears of joy and kissed the Prince.
The End
Reference
Disney, W., Buena Vista Home Entertainment. (1950). Cinderella. Burbank, CA: Walt Disney Home Entertainment.
Disney, W., Buena Vista Home Entertainment. (1991). Beauty and the Beast. Burbank, CA: Walt Disney Home Entertainment.
Disney, W., Buena Vista Home Entertainment. (1959). Sleeping Beauty. Burbank, CA: Walt Disney Home Entertainment.
Disney, W., Buena Vista Home Entertainment. (1959). Sleeping Beauty. Burbank, CA: Walt Disney Home Entertainment.

Well, Cinderella really is a pain in this one! Still, although she may not have deserved to have a happy ending, I liked this story and it's light-hearted and fun to read.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading it and I liked the story line you established. I also like the way you changed up the characters, I like the way you portrayed the step sisters! I did notice a couple of grammar errors though. I agree with Nadya it’s light-hearted and fun and I liked the happy ending!
ReplyDeleteSo this is a cross-over of Cinderella and Beauty and the Beast? If so, then combining two similar stories/genres (ie. two fairytales) is a great way to come up with a concept that is unique and seamless. I also like how you twisted the story by portraying Cinderella as not so perfect. Although, unlike most fairytales, she still gets a happy ending, despite being somewhat a villain. If this was longer (which it can't be obviously) then it would be great to see Cinderella's character development, particularly how her parents deaths made her bitter and angry (which might be a realistic response). Most of the language was quite traditional for the genre, although some of it was more modern eg. "what, come again?" and I found it a slightly odd choice, to blend the two.
ReplyDeleteI found this story a really fun read. I like how the prince was a beast and found that you were still able to keep it traditional fairy tale. I agree with Lucy and think it cool how you made Cinderella not very nice yet she still gets her own way. At the end it made me laugh how you said "cheers" reminds me really 21st century informal speech
ReplyDeleteWhat I like about this story is that you were able to reverse the character's traditional roles and yet still have the same tone as the original story-line. I also like that you gave a unique ending to a story that one wouldn't generally think anymore could be added to.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely interesting
I just hate to see a sad ending :(
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